tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post4945285379252436803..comments2023-10-14T09:31:41.455-04:00Comments on Metanoetic Poetics: The BetrayalAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-3528538530283536682012-03-13T00:38:08.852-04:002012-03-13T00:38:08.852-04:00Written from the gut..Chaz...I salute your brave w...Written from the gut..Chaz...I salute your brave write...Chills down to my toenails...Bravo!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-16076823328572751232012-03-05T17:29:06.621-05:002012-03-05T17:29:06.621-05:00From @velvetinapurrs via Twitter and at her reques...From @velvetinapurrs via Twitter and at her request<br /><br />Outside, I am dusk gathering, in oak arm's cradle, with a bright benign moon, listening to owls, but I hear only your poem, as night closes in..what can I say to this suffering? A brave brave poem..other's scars can cast razor shadows, burdens of responsibility, you do not deserve..a healing poem I hope for theeAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-82458634726886590552012-03-03T14:20:47.594-05:002012-03-03T14:20:47.594-05:00I can't add, only echo: powerful, brutal, terr...I can't add, only echo: powerful, brutal, terrifying. Beautiful language. I think i'd be grateful for the bullet, too. Thank you so much for sharing this.dshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07616750784052488695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-31060834474062141082012-03-03T11:56:20.808-05:002012-03-03T11:56:20.808-05:00Best thing you've written - hands down. This h...Best thing you've written - hands down. This had me all the way through - such a sad sad story so beautifully and brutally portrayed. Probably say this all the time- but this is poetry- pure raw human emotion. This genuinely touched me.... phenomenalstu mcp (hate & hope)http://www.poemsofhateandhope.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-59118250983682740512012-03-03T08:49:53.575-05:002012-03-03T08:49:53.575-05:00I think my fathers eyes showed it then..that sign ...I think my fathers eyes showed it then..that sign of betrayal..<br />I suppose one must learn to forgive others and oneself as well. Easier said than done.A moving personal poem that I am sure many will relate to.Cressida de Novahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00169216942864690995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-70678626033119629872012-03-03T04:22:22.177-05:002012-03-03T04:22:22.177-05:00This is very powerful writing. It gripped from the...This is very powerful writing. It gripped from the first line and didn't let up. I can' t think of anything else quite like it.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-90190244096091434372012-03-03T00:35:42.893-05:002012-03-03T00:35:42.893-05:00Amazing poem.....liked it very much...Amazing poem.....liked it very much...Nikhil Jainhttp://njpoems.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-51321253924235910232012-03-03T00:20:12.849-05:002012-03-03T00:20:12.849-05:00Told in painful clarity with a ringing authenticit...Told in painful clarity with a ringing authenticity - there is a depth of sadness here Charles that takes real courage to write - thank you; it does help to know that others walk the razor's edge ... and are willing to articulate their experienceS.E.Ingrahamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02135141369161538082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-3554424381729782132012-03-03T00:03:50.793-05:002012-03-03T00:03:50.793-05:00Powerful feelings...resigned to the painful scene ...Powerful feelings...resigned to the painful scene that has played out before...living on the edge. I can relate.Bodhirosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12630769135515322096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-40059581398227633282012-03-02T20:20:03.989-05:002012-03-02T20:20:03.989-05:00I feel your pain in this, Charles. Thanks so much...I feel your pain in this, Charles. Thanks so much for sharing it with me on Twitter. I'm always left speechless when reminded of the fact that I am not unique. I'm not sure why, but this part especially sings to me - a viceral effect of sorts:<br /><br />I'd have inscribed <br />secret signs in the moist clarity, <br />but all the secrets had finally drained away <br />like dirty Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-33582856530215592022012-03-02T08:35:33.486-05:002012-03-02T08:35:33.486-05:00snap dude....you do a great job telling the story,...snap dude....you do a great job telling the story, but it is your ability to make us feel it that sets this apart for me....ugh...def carries a punch...some great visuals as well...puts us right there.....great piece charles....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-53341771167818397392012-03-02T00:15:47.996-05:002012-03-02T00:15:47.996-05:00A part of me dead to the pain, to life, to surviva...A part of me dead to the pain, to life, to survival....and the last part esp. hit me in the stomach...you have no idea how much i can feel this... this is a wonderful, honest and raw piece charles..also like the painting on the fogged window - sets the stage perfectly for all that follows..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-83044819026784475422012-03-01T23:35:56.122-05:002012-03-01T23:35:56.122-05:00Thank you, Adan, for your words. The poem is very ...Thank you, Adan, for your words. The poem is very literal. I really appreciate your last words, since I thought a lot about why to publish this or not.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-67742427465501259692012-03-01T23:04:56.997-05:002012-03-01T23:04:56.997-05:00add a third wow! here charles - this was powerful!...add a third wow! here charles - this was powerful!<br /><br />esp, <br /><br />"I wake and hear <br />him climbing the walls to my bedroom window..."<br /><br />and to end with thankfulness for the bullet, man...if this was real, then my deep sympathies for all<br /><br />if fictional, you've probably done a huge good for many a soul out there...<br /><br />thank you charlesadanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00710750989853277203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-14171994081313185182012-03-01T20:07:42.958-05:002012-03-01T20:07:42.958-05:00My jaw's hanging... but I can say I loved the ...My jaw's hanging... but I can say I loved the first sentence and every single word thereafter. The ending is intense.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-81633465128568280042012-03-01T19:49:49.365-05:002012-03-01T19:49:49.365-05:00A poem of great feeling and intensity. The story ...A poem of great feeling and intensity. The story makes me sad, and I hope he is ok.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-81677195033697880852012-03-01T19:49:04.228-05:002012-03-01T19:49:04.228-05:00Wow.....
(sorry that's all I got right now)Wow..... <br />(sorry that's all I got right now)Dark Angelhttp://darkangelwrites.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-89724553589798426722012-03-01T19:45:45.779-05:002012-03-01T19:45:45.779-05:00Wow. Dark, intense--a powerful piece. The last lin...Wow. Dark, intense--a powerful piece. The last line especially is fantastic. The narrator's voice is vivid and strong. Great job! And thanks for sharing!Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.com