tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post5347496695594145529..comments2023-10-14T09:31:41.455-04:00Comments on Metanoetic Poetics: Tattoo, NYCAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comBlogger37125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-83626533937030983012012-07-23T23:43:16.471-04:002012-07-23T23:43:16.471-04:00Wonderful description. The description of henna i...Wonderful description. The description of henna is very intense.Lorna Cahallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12119513840378599480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-90084209824604684812012-07-23T15:21:50.462-04:002012-07-23T15:21:50.462-04:00What an awesome write, like a Nat Geo portrait it ...What an awesome write, like a Nat Geo portrait it gets the details and creates something amazing.Mystic_Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00099062213372011260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-61365404968675487052012-07-22T21:20:16.748-04:002012-07-22T21:20:16.748-04:00I would definitely want to blend, if you could tel...I would definitely want to blend, if you could tell all my secrets from one look. I love this piece and the way you describe her.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-29548052576729479712012-07-21T08:58:28.165-04:002012-07-21T08:58:28.165-04:00I like how you captured (freed?) her temperament a...I like how you captured (freed?) her temperament and the city's. The part about its indifference was particularly good. And how you traced a line through all your poem, reusing the same themes and objects, serves well your using the tattooed line in the first place. Great cohesion!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-22117849017239155962012-07-21T01:29:45.210-04:002012-07-21T01:29:45.210-04:00This is quite the poem. To tell you the truth, I d...This is quite the poem. To tell you the truth, I didn't see the end coming at all. Was it the look of her eyes, or the set of her shoulders, or something else that spoke this way to you...Thank you for your work at the pub!<br /><br />WanderWanderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12384347526625976847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-76527183226433491842012-07-20T19:30:09.881-04:002012-07-20T19:30:09.881-04:00what an awesome piece charles... yeah...maybe she ...what an awesome piece charles... yeah...maybe she wants to mingle with the crowd...love how you personify the tattoo and how you make us see her..a great poemClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-70741134138232586022012-07-20T17:15:15.934-04:002012-07-20T17:15:15.934-04:00This is definitely my favorite of yours. I really ...This is definitely my favorite of yours. I really want to hug her.<br /><br />These are my favorite parts:<br /><br />"She's captive for the moment <br />in her strangeness"<br /><br />"She wants to become <br />one of of us, merge with the crowd, <br />take on the freedom of the anonymous"flipside recordshttp://flipsiderecords.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-63876587893534090572012-07-20T15:17:17.077-04:002012-07-20T15:17:17.077-04:00Hmmm, lost my comment. There is freedom in blendi...Hmmm, lost my comment. There is freedom in blending that is totally unlike the colorful "don't care what you think" freedom... I've heard tell about. ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-82535424514306929672012-07-20T13:52:17.817-04:002012-07-20T13:52:17.817-04:00Ahh... to be part of the anonymous can sometimes b...Ahh... to be part of the anonymous can sometimes be good. Great piece!Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-66258389087575153442012-07-20T13:11:29.614-04:002012-07-20T13:11:29.614-04:00Very clever depiction of a damsel out in the open....Very clever depiction of a damsel out in the open. Wanting freedom but at the same time under scrutiny. Great write Charles!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-21427738526459273402012-07-20T00:29:54.240-04:002012-07-20T00:29:54.240-04:00so awash with depth it engulfs you, also engages y...so awash with depth it engulfs you, also engages you to think of landscape and the mindChris Lawrencehttp://velvetmedia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-62137664363107864572012-07-19T23:21:18.793-04:002012-07-19T23:21:18.793-04:00Interesting characterization and putting yourself ...Interesting characterization and putting yourself into the mind of another person. It reminded me of Gabriela Mistral's "The Stranger"Frank Watsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11512960953837979822noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-87740751944767371652012-07-19T22:42:42.399-04:002012-07-19T22:42:42.399-04:00shape-shifting city so apt--freedom of anonymity, ...shape-shifting city so apt--freedom of anonymity, one of the joys of being in the city, is not available to all--great poem!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-77729058506983590542012-07-19T21:51:49.605-04:002012-07-19T21:51:49.605-04:00oh the yearning to blend in, be anonymous. always ...oh the yearning to blend in, be anonymous. always fighting with the urge to stand out. a wonderful observation of a moment in time.mrs mediocrityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01021079985184737831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-24959559324651213052012-07-19T21:33:16.802-04:002012-07-19T21:33:16.802-04:00A wonderful poem . Thank you for your contribution...A wonderful poem . Thank you for your contribution this year.ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-30345524109781866632012-07-19T21:28:51.259-04:002012-07-19T21:28:51.259-04:00I can feel her discomfort reading this. Her henna ...I can feel her discomfort reading this. Her henna on her seems to be her whole life written for all who glance her way to see. And seemingly she knows she's new and different and feels all the more out of place -- no wonder she wishes she can be anonymous, not so different. Wonderful poem, great details.Ravenblackhttp://theotherdayplace.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-33965847951014932202012-07-19T20:49:58.548-04:002012-07-19T20:49:58.548-04:00Brilliant! So much is said in this moment about i...Brilliant! So much is said in this moment about identity, entrapment, art, desire . . . <br /><br />"She's captive for the moment<br />in her strangeness, out<br />of place in the city<br />that shifts shape to mirror<br />what's different and fit<br />it to its ultimate<br />indifference."<br /><br />You show her captive in the gaze of a stranger, down to the most exquisite Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-30551268541760051612012-07-19T17:21:16.502-04:002012-07-19T17:21:16.502-04:00excellent choice in one to revisit sir...love havi...excellent choice in one to revisit sir...love having you on staff..and great to get to meet ou in NYC as well...i look forward to our next year together...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-17790511390946996522012-07-19T17:17:44.211-04:002012-07-19T17:17:44.211-04:00You have told a much-lived story here in a fresh n...You have told a much-lived story here in a fresh new way - I especially loved the intricate word weaving in the second stanza.<br /><br />In a striking poem, this I found particularly striking:<br />"The blood of terror is a rose<br />in her hand."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-13573535002640378932012-07-19T17:12:34.956-04:002012-07-19T17:12:34.956-04:00Hadn't read this the first time; so am so glad...Hadn't read this the first time; so am so glad you gave it an encore so I could read it. Thinking about the 'anonymous' and how many times we encounter them and how many times we are the anonymous one!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-45324894567650095532012-07-19T16:41:43.401-04:002012-07-19T16:41:43.401-04:00rejecting direct contact to the freedom of anonymi...rejecting direct contact to the freedom of anonymity! I thoroughly enjoy your tattoo reference and description here. so glad you reposted this, i wasn't around for it last time and it has a colorful brilliance i wouldn't want to miss.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-82866921226771648982012-07-19T16:36:31.158-04:002012-07-19T16:36:31.158-04:00Important thoughts to catch the reader as the poem...Important thoughts to catch the reader as the poem unfoldsJohn (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-69589421293822933522012-07-19T16:19:44.892-04:002012-07-19T16:19:44.892-04:00I know I read this - could I have been so careless...I know I read this - could I have been so careless not to comment on the beautiful qualities of this poem. The careful detailing of a symbol in a person, an outsider trying to be an insider, wishing to integrate to a place of anonymity. Really this is beautifully written with excellent diction and finish that seizes the imagination. Understand why you gave it an encore!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-78400857166109171292012-07-19T16:09:34.355-04:002012-07-19T16:09:34.355-04:00I agree with Victoria on your excellent characteri...I agree with Victoria on your excellent characterization. This poem is full of lines that made me pause and consider, not just her, or the meaning of context within an environment, but what art means, why we engage each other through these forms when we can't seem to connect in the flesh (if that makes any sense). There's something here of reality and the aesthetic of heightened Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-84233691006504355872012-07-19T15:35:02.873-04:002012-07-19T15:35:02.873-04:00Wonderful poem - have seen the scene, and see it a...Wonderful poem - have seen the scene, and see it again, so powerfully, in your words. k.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com