tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post6493389432235077777..comments2023-10-14T09:31:41.455-04:00Comments on Metanoetic Poetics: OblationAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08784125345525784337noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-89785421213911358672012-07-27T07:25:05.251-04:002012-07-27T07:25:05.251-04:00raw heartfelt realraw heartfelt reallucychilihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519163424062626658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-17395516294194070172012-07-27T00:07:53.287-04:002012-07-27T00:07:53.287-04:00I agree with Victoria - feels and sounds like Augu...I agree with Victoria - feels and sounds like Augustine and Merton - (two of my favorite) - and yes it may take the alter, it may take the surrender of self, but our God has also created our flesh and to use it for good is our goal, to understand it is our creed...we are born human (body and soul) let us take our body, our desire to the alter not only for surrender but so too for thankfulness....signed...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-3064247030420241652012-07-26T11:52:24.196-04:002012-07-26T11:52:24.196-04:00heavy emotions in this and it made so much more se...heavy emotions in this and it made so much more sense after reading your footnote..these are the moments that bring us out of balance and make us rethink life...the having nothing to offer...very strong write charlesClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-75382028933152172142012-07-25T18:31:02.117-04:002012-07-25T18:31:02.117-04:00Such a thoughtful offering, deep and guttural. Th...Such a thoughtful offering, deep and guttural. The repetitive lines add to the emotion of the piece. Thanks Charles.Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-26890210879430518652012-07-25T16:54:04.852-04:002012-07-25T16:54:04.852-04:00To me, this feels like it is to be reflected upon,...To me, this feels like it is to be reflected upon, not just read. I sense the influence of many great souls from Augustine to Merton. You note about the timing of this poem, post-911, brought to light the inspiration behind it. It somehow mirrors how I feel about the senseless killing in Aurora (or VA Tech, Colombine--you name it).Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-45812461715493777352012-07-25T09:28:52.915-04:002012-07-25T09:28:52.915-04:00to say the feel of empathy and suffering are timel...to say the feel of empathy and suffering are timeless is to simply state I know of pain....but this is personal and you show a willingness to relieve...even at your own hand...even if it hurts......you<br /><br />respectable and respectful write, my friend<br /><br />☮<br /><br />if you care to:<br /><br /><a href="http://worldcoloredglasses.wordpress.com/2012/07/24/consumption/" rel="nofollow">RDhttp://www.worldcoloredglasses.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-19069383926233402762012-07-24T23:49:25.334-04:002012-07-24T23:49:25.334-04:00they merge with the velocity, and drive the car, a...they merge with the velocity, and drive the car, and going off the cliff -> all that really makes the poem move ;)<br /><br /><a href="http://zongrik.wordpress.com/2012/07/23/four-child-with-book-senryu/" rel="nofollow">four child with book senryu</a>zongrikhttp://zongrik.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-3518787046803585132012-07-24T23:23:19.294-04:002012-07-24T23:23:19.294-04:00An exquisite, impassioned yet beautifully understa...An exquisite, impassioned yet beautifully understated/reined-in poem, Charles-- I love these lines: "I have nothing to offer<br /><br />On the altar but this flesh, this desire of desire,<br /><br />The lie and the fear that the flesh bears."<br /><br />Consummate lyricism here...xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-22963458746096641862012-07-24T23:12:03.809-04:002012-07-24T23:12:03.809-04:00This bears all the marks of primal pain borne out ...This bears all the marks of primal pain borne out of suffering, doubt, confusion, bereft with sorrow - we would give anything to expiate that pain, to sacrifice for the pain of others, to stop the horror. Well expressed!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-16751314403203978592012-07-24T22:46:06.787-04:002012-07-24T22:46:06.787-04:00these are the questions. we can only keep asking, ...these are the questions. we can only keep asking, keep offering, keep living, flawed though we may be. <br />powerful poem.mrs mediocrityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01021079985184737831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-4267968923713539942012-07-24T22:01:57.908-04:002012-07-24T22:01:57.908-04:00I know how you feel, I don't like to see anyon...I know how you feel, I don't like to see anyone, place or thing in pain, or being in. Got it and you've written it well and very true feeling of all emphatic people .Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-66318737528650575332012-07-24T21:58:33.706-04:002012-07-24T21:58:33.706-04:00It tugs at our conscience to see sufferings sensel...It tugs at our conscience to see sufferings senselessly perpetrated. We often wonder what prompt those with weapons to turn them towards those defenseless souls. Worst are modern and sophisticated firepower on the population on the pretext of weeding out a couple of enemies within them. You've said it right, Charles! We can only wonder!<br />Very well crafted!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-86799760375218668452012-07-24T21:29:38.048-04:002012-07-24T21:29:38.048-04:00Hi Charles, this is exactly why I like literature ...Hi Charles, this is exactly why I like literature (art/poetry/fiction/storytelling) so much better than philosophy. Because I kind of don't think one can bring anything more than confusion to that altar, and the flesh and all that you say flesh bears ( the desire of desire, lie and fear.) I just don't believe one can think an answer to the oneness etc.; think through a meaning. Or Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-12939135610015061802012-07-24T21:17:20.395-04:002012-07-24T21:17:20.395-04:00"Let me bring these sparks of confusion to th..."Let me bring these sparks of confusion to the altar,<br /><br />Set them on the pyre and merge into the light."<br /><br />Such striking language...love your word placement throughout and the meaning within. Very emotively written, Charles.Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-52612247854194026622012-07-24T20:41:32.623-04:002012-07-24T20:41:32.623-04:00You handle this with grace and humanity, delving i...You handle this with grace and humanity, delving into the heart of vulnerability, questioning, and spiritual confusion. An admirable poem that has none of the gratuity or exploitation of the media coverage of this event.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-7405343864014887572012-07-24T19:47:19.207-04:002012-07-24T19:47:19.207-04:00I love this prayer of giving what you don't e...I love this prayer of giving what you don't even have, of loving who you don't even know. Your writing is so full of emotion. I hope you publish your book soon.Myrna R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15088915165678737118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-16597407749548546192012-07-24T18:15:55.381-04:002012-07-24T18:15:55.381-04:00Oblation. Not the senseless roll off the cliff to...Oblation. Not the senseless roll off the cliff to death, but the willing giving of all you have. Does anyone believe that this will give them the answers? Your quote from Rabi'a tells me you think not. Yet I love this poem for its desperate need, for its repetition, for the fact that it is a true oblation in the tradition of psalms but from an older world of human sacrifice, a very recentSusanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-5596012479822641842012-07-24T17:37:44.028-04:002012-07-24T17:37:44.028-04:00It is all so apt after the recent mindless slaught...It is all so apt after the recent mindless slaughters in Aurora. There are really no words we can use that would begin to cover the pain of those family and friends who are left to wonder... why... the senseless massacres. <br />Deep thoughts Charles, from a good heart.Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1962841480087192036.post-71173729368285664892012-07-24T17:28:33.023-04:002012-07-24T17:28:33.023-04:00i have nothing to offer on this altar...sometimes ...i have nothing to offer on this altar...sometimes it is best to come that way, it signifies in many ways th end of ourselves and our own power...and honesty before the one we are pleeding...and that is came just after another tragic event...nice...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com