<Eden>
</utopia>
</land of never to be>
<dream>
The nightmare
Born from
Chaos
<knowledge>
</good>
</evil>
I see a mirage
In the desert heat
It looks like me
<g-->
Speaking in the cool
Breath soughed
By palm trees
Words as sweet
As pomegranate seeds
<wind>
<בּת קול>
</1>
</0>
<...>
</...>
</בּת קול>
</wind>
</g-->
</knowledge>
</dream>
</Eden>
bat kol (Hebrew בּת קול) - The voice of God, literally "daughter of a voice"
Copyright 2013 Charles David Miller. All rights reserved.
Arrives like an insufflation; wonderful to read your work again.
ReplyDeleteI have no words.
ReplyDeleteGood god that's beyond great.
Charles, I LOVE this. Enjoyed the inclusion of Hebrew, the artistic aspects of the presentation and so many layers. Now I've got to look up the Hebrew!
ReplyDeleteCharles, so nice to hear your voice. I am having trouble commenting, but love the soughing of palms and the mirage that is me. The HEBREW is Greek to me but I hear Thalassa in my mind. (I know that's not right, but like the poem no matter!) Wonderful. k.
ReplyDeleteps - this is Karin Manicddaily, but blogger wants me to use an old identity k.
I love all the layers to this, and the meanings beneath the words, so many images and thoughts swirl throughout, and it feels very pertinent to what is going on in the world today. Really nice.
ReplyDeleteLovely! I smiled because I can read the hebew :)
ReplyDeleteWow... so many layers here, and woven tightly too. I have the hunger for Eden too, well done!
ReplyDeletevery cool...love the whole style of the poem, the inclusion of the signs...the mirage in the desert looking like you...great capture of that feel throughout...and so good to see you in the pub...big smiles
ReplyDeleteThanks, Chaz! I like it!
ReplyDeleteThe mirage that is you...wow~ interesting form you took here...almost like the pattern of desert sand tracks...good to see you, Chaz!
ReplyDeletethis really strikes out in depth..cool presentation of words that are felt with each roll.
ReplyDeleteknowledge
Dream
Eden
Lovely....
what an interesting layering charles, merging modern foldering with modern poetic line breaks
ReplyDeletereally liked, in the middle of the body of the work,
"I see a mirage
In the desert heat
It looks like me"
thanks so much charles, take care ;-)
hey Chaz:
ReplyDeleteI definitely think that the formatting lends a sense of transience:
the Impermanence of the wilderness perhaps?
I like the shapes created by the letters and edit: to my untrained eye
almost an alien language or set of symbols evokes a kind of supernatural communication or code which I like in this context.
The parenthesis in variation can suggest various interpretations
and conceptual shaping to the words which offers extra food for thought. . . almost a conflict of meaning in the presentation
which for me keeps each reading fresh
and the whole is open, in a certain sense of flux
or non concrete notion
which, as I see it, also adds to the write.
cheers Chaz
I like this a lot. The inclusion of code is akin to removing a veil...the reader is getting an inside look.
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Mark Butkus
i swear i commented on this yesterday....really cool on the structure charles...the creative delivery and the inclusion of the hebrew...kind text speak/coding....the crux for me though is...
ReplyDeleteI see a mirage
In the desert heat
It looks like me
the desert is a tough place to be...and seeing an illusion of yourself is an interesting play on finding yourself or even seeing who you were or will be....
its good to see you are well man...
ReplyDeleteSuch an intriguing poem. I especially love "words as sweet as pomegranate seeds". Way cool format, too.
ReplyDeleteI've read four times and each time, found a new focus as each layer stands on the next. Wonderful
ReplyDeleteYou melt ancient into modern beautifully.
ReplyDeleteThat's just amazing!
ReplyDeleteWe all dream of Eden...interesting poem that's for sure! I really loved the line words as sweet as pomegranates!
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